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I pull up in his dad's driveway
and the boy sitting on the stoop
looks like Saint Exupery's treasured little prince.
When he climbs inside my used Sentra,
I tell him about this quirky realization.
"You're both so cute and opinionated."
He grins and replies that it's his favorite book
to read when life is particularly rough.

Cappuccino sips and playful shoves
convert the evening into something
brilliantly unstable and devastatingly 'teenager'.
I want to kiss him violently so we can stop this
annoying game of cat and mouse.
But instead, we discuss music
and other topics that make me feel childish.

He asks where I would go if I could
teleport myself anywhere at any desired time
and I confess that I'd like to visit
someplace up north with a lot of trees and
not enough people to criticize me.
He nods like he understands but I
wonder if he secretly thinks I'm rude.

Propping himself up on the hood of the car,
he takes a long drink and I watch how his
throat works as he swallows
the caramel mixture in his clover cup.
The delicately strong sight
makes me want to make his voice crack
like a window in a dusty haunted Victorian.

But before I can attempt anything gritty,
he wraps his soft lips around my mouth,
keeping one hand pressed against my cheek
over the embarrassing heat of my surprise.

"What, you didn't like it?"
he asks in a teasing tone.
But a loud pop tears through
the poetry-starched air,
followed by a bouncing
truck full of raunchy apes.
They flail bottles over their heads
and stain the serene
parking lot with cheap beer and blood.

The boy reaches for
my hand and one of the aggressors sees.
He starts shouting
ugly words that make my arms stiffen
with anger and weariness
because I've heard these
gutter type limericks so
many times that they've
stopped being interesting.

Pushing my friend into
the car's safe interior,
I turn to face the hulking creature.
He takes a swing at me
and I smash my fist against his nose
before the others can join in.
The blow sends him stumbling a few feet,
buying us time to escape with
a screeching of wheels
on the now notorious pavement.

"That was close!" I laugh as I collapse
in the passenger seat,
letting the cute boy
drive my car out of town.
He gives me a horrified
look and doesn't stop shaking,
even when I swear I'm alright.

We park a few houses
away from his home and
he takes a shuddering breath.
I place my hand on his chest
where his heart is mimicking
Bon Jovi's drums.
"I'm sorry I ruined our date,"
I say, though I don't know why.
Maybe I just needed an excuse
to hold his hand again.

He glances at me with
foreign astronaut blue eyes,
fantastic in the dim
saffron glow of a street lamp.
"Don't say that," he commands,
though I almost smile because
there is nothing but
fake authority there.
"Just kiss me,"
he adds stiffly.

"I think you like danger,"
I gasp when we pull apart.
He leans toward me as if
I'm dependable and the thought
saddens me because he's
too beautiful and compliant;
high cheekbones flushed with
excitement for all things fun.

Recalling how he pulled
on my tie earlier makes me
want to push him down
in the backseat and sweep
my hands all over his
wickedly androgynous form
with the intent to please
but also brand like
the way kids carve
initials into playground toys.
I want this boy to understand
why we were almost murdered;
because I already love him..

And even though I wish I could
rip off my winter uniform and
take him hard beneath
a screen of velvet-penciled sky,
I know we're both better than
this trashy porn scene.
So I whisper "take care"
and ruffle his hair as
he tries to hug me in
all his biker jacket glory.
This is about the violence that gay teens face.
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:iconfyreman666:
Fyreman666 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing work, truly amazing. Instant fave!
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
thank you so much :D your icon is cute, by the way.
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:iconfyreman666:
Fyreman666 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, is one of my OCs made from Rinmaru Games. Wanna know about a story I'm writing? It's my first guy on guy story, actually.
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
sure :) what's it about?
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:iconfyreman666:
Fyreman666 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Basically, it's a bout a new student at a private school being openly gay, gets into fights, defending himself but sometimes getting hurt pretty badly. He has a roommate, but his roommate wasn't always a guy, and has a bit of a feminine look to him... His roommate was born female, but at an early age went through a full change. I have it a bit fantasy-like/not fully realistic where his roomy doesn't really have any problems with the hormones, and everything below the belt works how it should.
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
sounds interesting. have you written the first chapter yet?
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:iconfyreman666:
Fyreman666 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have it started, it isn't completed. I've been working more on my story Parental Love. That story is a bit intense, and is a good read for fantasy/supernatural lovers.
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brenanaphone Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
Really, truly fantastic. Great symbolism throughout. Loved it.
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
thank you!
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
Hi! Just letting you know your amazing work has been featured!!

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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
I'm so honored..thank you!!
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
:heart:
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RCgoesRAWR Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Wowm this is really touching.. Great story, great form. I'm not usually a fan of poetry, but damn, I got chills..
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
thank you!
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samsocksadopts Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Filmographer
congrats on the dd your work here is awesome! :meow: it seems almost real in a sense while you read it. great job on doing that! (course for me i easily get lost in what i read (as in my mind takes me to the place into the story as i read))
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
my mind does the exact same thing :D escapism and all that jazz. thanks, I'm so glad you liked it!
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samsocksadopts Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Filmographer
XD (so rare to find people like us huh?) mmmmhm! :meow:
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
lol you're cute.
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samsocksadopts Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Filmographer
thanks! :meow:
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aurora-celest Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
An enrapturing narrative. :)
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thank you :)
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ZalMoonwolf Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
One: I was hooked as soon as I saw the Little Prince reference. ;)
Two: The flow of this is just...gorgeous. It really draws you in, makes you believe you ARE the boy going through all of this.

Fantastic job, really well done. :)
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thank you! yeah, the little prince is one of the cutest stories ever, I just had to mention it :D
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Desuke-Love Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Writer
Fantastic! I really love the flow; like one of those voices telling a story over a montage almost. Well done!
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thank you!
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Desuke-Love Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Writer
No problem ^^
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KMusicDreamer Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh man, this is amazing. I feel like all judgmental straight people should read this poem because it shows the emotion that everyone feels when they're in love. And they wouldn't guess it at first who is the first person, but once they got it, they'd have to take a step back and reevaluate themselves. Just beautiful.
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
yeah, like what's wrong with loving another person? you're absolutely right and thank you for leaving such a beautiful comment on my poem.
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KMusicDreamer Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Exactly! :) You're welcome. My pleasure, honestly.
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ChocoCoatedLemons Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
This was absolutely superb. It really, really was.
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:iconautumn-spirit:
autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
aww that's sweet of you thanks!
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This felt brutal, beautiful and honest..It makes me sad that shit like that still happens. Ignorance and intolerance, such a poisonous combination.

The two lines that stuck with me are these, they are beautiful:

"I want to kiss him violently so we can stop this
annoying game of cat and mouse."

Setting aside that it says "him" and not "her", I've felt that way before. Strongly. I love that is says "violently", because that feeling is..it's a feeling one remembers, especially if you can't get to do it anymore with that person.

Such a lovely poem ^^ thanks for sharing it.
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thank you for commenting and I'm glad you like it
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puppysmooch Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
BEST
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thanks :D
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puppysmooch Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
YOU ARE WELCOME
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Asahi-sensei Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
i love it !
i love you mate :heart:
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
aww! thanks,sweetie!
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Asahi-sensei Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
=3
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
Honest and beautifully written. I love this. :heart:
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thanks!
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Burnzy69 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
nice job
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thanks!
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LeaChan12 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Love the story, it's so sweet! :hug: Congrats!
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thank you
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LeaChan12 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Welcome!!
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KCsummerz Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconcongratsdd1plz::iconcongratsdd2plz::iconcongratsdd3plz:
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
thanksie!
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KCsummerz Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:D
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DrIgnacious Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I thought this was male love to begin with and I was right. I can say that in my town all that people do is talk.
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